American Captive

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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Mon Dec 13, 2021 9:14 pm

Also, I forgot to mention I once considered writing a book of rhymes called Hook, Hook, The Toilet Book.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Mon Dec 13, 2021 9:15 pm

Berkley Babes wrote:Bugbook could be a about fire bug, and people could burn it.

Have you ever burned a book before? I have. The catcher in the rye. I like that book, so I had to buy it again after I watched the ink turn to smoke.

edit, please call the bug, nanobug.


No, I demand that you call it nanobug
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Re: American Captive

Postby Meno_ » Mon Dec 13, 2021 9:22 pm

Berkley Babes wrote:
Berkley Babes wrote:Bugbook could be a about fire bug, and people could burn it.

Have you ever burned a book before? I have. The catcher in the rye. I like that book, so I had to buy it again after I watched the ink turn to smoke.

edit, please call the bug, nanobug.


No, I demand that you call it nanobug




Ok nanobug no plagiarism .......withstanding insistance accepted, and unsurprisingly second the motion for mutual benifit.

Course reminders to the man named suit.
Or the man well.....suited. I was gunna say hung Adrian but somehow never could get into nexus plexus or ....after ulyssi
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Re: American Captive

Postby Meno_ » Mon Dec 13, 2021 9:22 pm

Gotta Starr editing.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Meno_ » Mon Dec 13, 2021 9:39 pm

Incidentally, last time talking with the saint, saint James that is eons ago, talked to him from Vegas. Now here in the aria, just sitting around waiting gidot like, defaming , dreaming. So much to say so little time. This is not the kind of place you can just sit around. Like waiting f of something goody like being as unabtrucive as can be thinking blue Picasso like why things are coming a part.

So I got enough of rationality and eyes not desisting , thinking of the spy that loved me, and go up to bar, bar me at this time of day, but ol now.

And ask for any kind of bourbon and the astounding 17 dollars for a shot reminding me of someone,...long...INg.

Oh please.

So unabashadly go on.....to all slaves of fortune ....but boundaries are necessary even for an idiot, but one to contend with. Must read visibly, or the invisible part would fade into anynomity.

And who cares about the ideal connecting with he just to be cut off?

Is this really the final call
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Mon Dec 13, 2021 9:44 pm

that shit is awesome

like attending a fine wake again.

used to dress in a milk mans outfit, I hear, to reflect the sun.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Meno_ » Mon Dec 13, 2021 9:47 pm

Berkley Babes wrote:that shit is awesome

like attending a fine wake again.

used to dress in a milk mans outfit, I hear, to reflect the sun.





& waaaaaaaaaaaay be yonder.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Meno_ » Mon Dec 13, 2021 9:47 pm

But boundaries prevail
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Mon Dec 13, 2021 9:50 pm

prevail, another line drawn, at the pace of a snail, slick sand, so rail on.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Meno_ » Mon Dec 13, 2021 10:16 pm

Berkley Babes wrote:prevail, another line drawn, at the pace of a snail, slick sand, so rail on.



Some prevalence is a put upon pie.
Not put on, but put upon.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Mon Dec 13, 2021 10:20 pm

Meno_ wrote:
Berkley Babes wrote:prevail, another line drawn, at the pace of a snail, slick sand, so rail on.



Some prevalence is a put upon pie.
Not put on, but put upon.


upon an apron serving crusty crumbles, at the edge of what is prevalent, thumb plunk down in it and up with its jam jelly
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Re: American Captive

Postby Meno_ » Mon Dec 13, 2021 10:42 pm

Hung Adrian heresies is a source of conflict.

(Personally attested beyond boundary)
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Mon Dec 13, 2021 10:44 pm

Meno_ wrote:Hung Adrian heresies is a source of conflict.

(Personally attested beyond boundary)



hungalungadingus, herc efforts.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Mon Dec 13, 2021 11:08 pm

Meno, as much of a fool as I am for non-sense, I gotta go for now.

Everybody else enjoy the novel as contained within this thread. It is fiction but also crazy personal.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Meno_ » Mon Dec 13, 2021 11:19 pm

Berkley Babes wrote:Meno, as much of a fool as I am for non-sense, I gotta go for now.

Everybody else enjoy the novel as contained within this thread. It is fiction but also crazy personal.




I understand. & please think of me why I wish to change my name to The Invisible.for then no grudges, shortcumings or mavericks can be held
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Mon Dec 13, 2021 11:20 pm

Meno_ wrote:
Berkley Babes wrote:Meno, as much of a fool as I am for non-sense, I gotta go for now.

Everybody else enjoy the novel as contained within this thread. It is fiction but also crazy personal.




I understand. & please think of me why I wish to change my name to The Invisible.for then no grudges, shortcumings or mavericks can be held


its not a shortcoming, its unique to you and at times refreshing, Mr. I still see you.

Dallas marvericks held to a few buckets.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Tue Dec 14, 2021 2:25 am

In some future revised edition the first lines of this novel would read . . .

Truth is, the best liars believe their own lies. The best actors live out their own act.
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Re: American Captive

Postby A Shieldmaiden » Tue Dec 14, 2021 6:26 am

posted twice
Last edited by A Shieldmaiden on Tue Dec 14, 2021 9:48 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: American Captive

Postby A Shieldmaiden » Tue Dec 14, 2021 9:40 am

Berkley Babes

Didn't expect much, but as I read on and on and on......... I think it is really good.
I am only up to Chap. 5 but it sort of reminds me of David Lynch, ie Lost Highway, Twin Peaks, style wise. Your descriptions of people are minimalistic (or for want of a better word, "contemporary") yet rich in the way in which an actor plays a character.

I don't want to rush it with the reading as I fear I may miss something.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Tue Dec 14, 2021 10:11 am

A Shieldmaiden wrote:Berkley Babes

Didn't expect much, but as I read on and on and on......... I think it is really good.
I am only up to Chap. 5 but it sort of reminds me of David Lynch, ie Lost Highway, Twin Peaks, style wise. Your descriptions of people are minimalistic (or for want of a better word, "contemporary") yet rich in the way in which an actor plays a character.

I don't want to rush it with the reading as I fear I may miss something.


Thanks for giving it a shot, really. No rush. Thanks also for letting me know how you experience it, as I'm open to your reaction, fully.
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Re: American Captive

Postby Meno_ » Tue Dec 14, 2021 6:03 pm

Berkley Babes wrote:
A Shieldmaiden wrote:Berkley Babes

Didn't expect much, but as I read on and on and on......... I think it is really good.
I am only up to Chap. 5 but it sort of reminds me of David Lynch, ie Lost Highway, Twin Peaks, style wise. Your descriptions of people are minimalistic (or for want of a better word, "contemporary") yet rich in the way in which an actor plays a character.

I don't want to rush it with the reading as I fear I may miss something.


Thanks for giving it a shot, really. No rush. Thanks also for letting me know how you experience it, as I'm open to your reaction, fully.





2and the motion
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Re: American Captive

Postby A Shieldmaiden » Tue Dec 14, 2021 11:12 pm

Chapter 6

Hilarious......
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Tue Dec 14, 2021 11:55 pm

A Shieldmaiden wrote:Chapter 6

Hilarious......


Haha, awesome of ya to say so.
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Re: American Captive

Postby A Shieldmaiden » Wed Dec 15, 2021 3:48 am

Except for

On my way back, I think I see the ghost of that scrawny dead dog hobbling across the street, his nose to ground, still looking for those long forgotten scraps. I rub my eyes and he disappears, but I can still hear him begging from the woods.


Cut me up...
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Re: American Captive

Postby Berkley Babes » Wed Dec 15, 2021 9:24 am

A Shieldmaiden wrote:Except for

On my way back, I think I see the ghost of that scrawny dead dog hobbling across the street, his nose to ground, still looking for those long forgotten scraps. I rub my eyes and he disappears, but I can still hear him begging from the woods.


Cut me up...


If it helps, in real life he was fed and rescued. True story.
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